Alrighty then! If this thread works I'll place my story here. The second post is probably the story. Let's hope...

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YIPPIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! It seems to work! Enjoy! Prologue/Chapter 1: The Awakening. I stirred. A long time I had slept, but it seemed that my peace had ended. I felt prayers, begging me to return. I tried to ignore them, but they became more urgent. Sleepily I tried to find out what the prayers were. I tried to hear what they said, but it was not hard enough. I forced myself to stir, so I could find out what the prayers said. Still sleepy I looked around. Around me were soft walls, like cushions. I tried to remember where I was, and then I noticed I had forgotten my own name, and everything that had happened. I started thinking about what had happened. Slowly I remembered. I remembered how I was born, how I had fought Lethys and lost Khazar. How I had destroyed Lethys. How I had destroyed Nemesis. I remembered how I was to my believers, how I was loved. I was , I aided the people, and they worshipped me willingly. I had found the three parts of the Creed, the source of godly power, which allowed me to destroy any god who opposed me. I used it on Nemesis, to destroy the greatest evil ever. I was good, but that didn’t mean I didn’t attack my enemies with fireballs or megablasts. I would fight for ness. The last city of Nemesis was an Aztec city, which believed slightly too much in Nemesis. I couldn’t make them believe me; their belief was too strong. I had to kill everyone, and then I took the city by sending my believers to populate it. I hated the killing, but I would do anything for ness. The Creed had become a part of me after the battle with Nemesis. Slowly, the Creed and I fused. It took thousands of years, but I gained much power. And if I would be destroyed, the Creed would be destroyed as well. This made sure that no god could ever gain the Creed. Unfortunately new gods came. Some were , but most were . The gods destroyed all the gods, but I hunted them down. Many were destroyed by the power of the Creed, but I noticed that many were unaffected by the Creed. They were not created by its power. The power of the Creed was no longer necessary to create gods, and the Creed could only undo things created by its own power. Even though I couldn’t destroy them with the Creed, my own powers had grown considerably, and they were augmented by the Creed. Thanks to this I could easily destroy all gods, and peace rained on Eden. After Millions of years I became tired however, and I left Eden, so I could rest. At the edge of the void I created a cocoon, in which I could sleep. And there I slept for millions of years… As I remembered this all I suddenly felt the prayers again. One suddenly seemed to boom, and I felt how urgent it was. Still I couldn’t understand it. The voice seemed muffled. I focused all my attention on the prayer. ‘Help us! Help us our god, the greatest god ever! Help us or we will be killed! I beg of you please help us!’ The voice died away. I felt a thug. I resisted, my brain working on topspeed. What was happening? Who would kill my followers? Another god? ‘I guess I’ll find out soon enough if I help my followers’ I mumbled. I felt the thug again, this time more urgently, and this time I didn’t resist. I felt my power grow, and suddenly I burst into flames, and shot at the wall of my cocoon. It resisted, but I used all of my will to go trough it, and it gave away. I was suddenly outside, slowed by the wall, but I used my willpower to speed up. I noticed I was a fireball, gaining more speed every second, and I shot straight towards Eden. I looked behind me, and though the flames obscured my view, I could see the cocoon buckle upon itself, and it exploded into a gigantic fireball. The remains were sucked into the Void. I concentrated again on the prayer. I gained more and more speed. In moments I was entering the atmosphere of Eden. I felt there were many newborn gods, but there were a few gods who were quite old as well. Suddenly I heard a strange sound. I looked down and I saw two creatures fight. But suddenly I saw something reflect the sunlight. As I looked closer I saw that many men were hitting each other with shining sticks. I felt many people die here. After a few seconds I had passed the land. And far on the horizon I saw an island that beckoned me. The prayers became stronger every second. I did not know what would await me. But I knew that I protect my people, and fight for ness. For I am Solar, Lightbringer, Lord of Justice, the Sungod, and the most powerful god ever. I cannot be denied. Please give critism!

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you a sungod too ^^, i'm the revealer, not the lightbringer, bring light were darkness dwells . Anyway, it was very good, very correct. No grammar errors and nicely explained. I can't believe that humans would still just be in the iron age after millions of years . They'd be futuristic by now normally. The human will the exceed can't be controlled really, just because gods always do the same doesn't mean humans will. Besides that it's good, keep it up, but try to make it longer next time ^^!

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Hey, Eden is no normal place. The villagers are extremely dumb. I mean, who would just starve because they're to lazy to collect food? Solar was my first (and only) good god. It was the first time I ever succeded in getting a good god. It also was my strongest god ever. The creature was also the strongest I ever had. Most unfortunetly something went wrong and that profile can't load savegames anymore I've started writing chapter 2, but you'll have to wait for a small while. By the way Amaunator, aren't you Belgian? (I am, so I'm interested. Most unfortunetly I live in the Netherlands)

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That was good. Amaunator has a good point about the millions of years bit, that's enough time for evolution, let alone technology . I only remember one real error, though. When you meant to say "tug", you said "thug" both times. Tug-a light pull Thug-a brute

As I said, the villagers are extremely dumb, so it takes a lot of time. Who said it hadn't been like this for a long time already? But I'll remember it. And thanks for the tug part I'll try to post another chapter soon.

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Yes, I'm Belgian . You should read up on the reactions from your own criticism . holland ... amai men gat!

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I'm busy with the story right now. The next chapter will be: Chapter 2: The arrival. As I came closer to the island I felt that many of my followers were dying. I increased my speed. After a while I could see a city. It had walls, but they were destroyed at a few points. I noticed that the fighting was outside the city. The men of the city that were fighting the attackers were dying at an alarming rate. I knew I would be too late to save them, but I would take revenge for them... This is just to make you curious :P , Chapter 2 (the complete version) will be released soon. Cya!

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Here comes chapter 2! ENJOY! Chapter 2: The arrival. As I came closer to the island I felt that many of my followers were dying. I increased my speed. After a while I could see a city. It had walls, but they were destroyed at a few points. I noticed that the fighting was outside the city. The men of the city that were fighting the attackers were dying at an alarming rate. I knew I would be too late to save them, but I would take revenge for them. I changed my course towards the battle, and increased my power. The last of my followers who was fighting died. Three seconds later I arrived. I overloaded the power of the fireball I had travelled in, and it exploded with tremendous force. The fire and heat killed all the attackers in a few seconds. I was free from the fireball, and my symbol, a sun, floated in the air. I looked around, and saw that the city was a Greek city. And almost everyone was on the walls, looking at me. I saw a lot of copses, scattered over the grassy plains, with arrows in their bodies. The ground seemed burned a long time ago, for there was little grass. Beneath me were most of the dead. I saw around 50 Greeks, their bodies badly burned by the explosion I had created. I saw at least 100 other men, not Greek. I saw burned wooden constructions, and I wondered what had happened after I had left. I turned to look at the Greek City. Every villager was on the wall. Many were whispering fearfully. I moved towards the City. When they noticed I was coming they became silent. I hovered before them. I asked in a silent but clear voice: ‘Who has prayed me to return?’ After a long silence, a man stepped forth. He said: ‘I did, greatest of all gods. My priests and I begged you to return.’ ‘Who are you?’ I asked. ‘Who do you worship?’ ‘We worship you, holy one. We are perhaps the last of your followers. The Greeks have been your most loyal followers, but most have been killed by other gods, because we believe so strongly in you. The other tribes have lost their faith in you.’ ‘Why?’ I asked. ‘Why have they lost faith in me?’ ‘You haven’t been here to help them. To help them when they were attacked. Gods made many tribes hate each other. We could do nothing against it.’ I looked at the man. I asked: ‘so you’re the leader of these priests?’ The man said: ‘Yes, lord. I am the oldest and wisest.’ I looked at him. He had grey hair, was scarred and looked like he had seen many terrible things. You could see lines of sorrow on his face. But what interested me was that he seemed very calm. It would take a lot to get this man hopeless or terrified. And his belief in me was very strong. ‘What’s your name?’ I asked curiously. ‘Cratas’ he answered. ‘Well Cratas, What would you say of a position as high priest?’ He looked at me, dumbstruck. ‘Are you sure Lord? Are you sure you wish me to be your high priest?’ I looked at him. ‘I am. If you wish to be it, that is.’ ‘Thank you lord,’ Cratas was now starting to cry of happiness. ‘Thank you. I’ll try not to let you down.’ ‘You won’t let me down’ I said. ‘I’m certain of it.’ I flew up and looked at the City. It wasn’t very large, and it wasn’t well maintained. There were two- or three hundred villagers living here. I looked down, and said to Crates: ‘We will need a temple. And a place to worship.’ Cratas cautiously said: ‘Are you sure they have to be separated?’ I frowned. ‘What do you mean?’ Hesitating, Cratas said: ‘Well, the other gods have a new type of temple, which costs less space and in it the people also worship…’ I thought about it for a minute, and then said: ‘Sounds good. You’ll lead the construction of the temple Cratas. In the meanwhile I’ll take a look around.’ Crates bowed and started shouting orders to the villagers. They immediately started working. Some went to the mountains; some went to the forest. Above the noise I heard Cratas shout: ‘Work hard and fast for Lord Solar, for he has returned at last!’ I smiled, and flew up. I looked around. The Greek City was on one side of the island. There was only one wall (which was damaged and breached at several places), which ran between two mountains. It was the only way to get to the City, unless you went by boat. The gate was heavily damaged, but still standing. Many strange wooden constructs were on the wall. I decided to ask Crates. Just as I was about to turn I stopped. I had forgotten something, but what? Wait, normally I would get advice. Where was my conscience? I mentally summoned them. Nothing happened. I gave a mental prod to them. I felt something stir, but it seemed to fall asleep again I gave another mental prod, slightly stronger this time. Something stirred again, but again it seemed to fall asleep. Annoyed I gave a very hard prod. Suddenly Beardy popped in sight, looking tired but shocked. ‘Oh, I’m late! Wake up you worthless piece of junk!’ Demon popped in sight as well. ‘What do ya mean ya goodie slimeball! Oh, sorry boss! Didn’t mean you!’ Beardy shouted: ‘Our lines! We have to welcome our god!’ Demon said: ‘Oh yeah! You can start!’ Beardy: ‘Greetings.’ Demon: ‘We are your conscience’ Beardy: ‘’ Demon: ‘And ’ Beardy: Yin and… I interrupted: ‘You already told me when I arrived on Eden for the first time, remember?’ Beardy said embarrassed: ‘Oh, ehm… sorry great leader, I forgot.’ ‘You stupid idiot!’ Shouted Demon. ‘Your as dumb as a…’ ‘You also said your lines!’ Beardy defended himself. ‘Yeah, but I did it because…’ ‘HEY!’ I shouted. ‘CAN YOU STOP BICKERING?!’ Both looked shocked, and became silent. ‘I need you to give advice, not to argue all the time.’ Beardy said: ‘I guess that we..’ he glanced sideways at Demon, ‘..can do that.’ ‘.’ I said. ‘So what do you propose me to do?’ Beardy answered: ‘I’d say we should do a little reconnaissance to see what’s on this island.’ ‘Sounds good.’ I said, and I flew up. The next chapter is: Chapter 3: The meeting. There is a chance the name of the chapter changes though. I'll try to post again soon, and please write critism! ps: To amaunator, I've got your MSN. pss: First chapter was 1,5 pages long, and this one is nearly 2 pages long, so don't complain about how short my first chapter was.

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I noticed that it had lenghtened somewhat and i also noticed that you invited me . Sry i wasn't there but i had taken a shower . chapter btw, Beardy and Demon are fun, i wonder how it would have been for a new god to be without consultants if they still be sleeping .

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Thanks Amaunator. The next chapter will probably come on saturday. Keep writing critism.

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Heya. I broke the 50 vieuws. I'm probably going to use the 'change into a human' idea as well, but I'd like to know what you think of that. I'm also thinking about recruiting Gods... I have 2 gods, 1 god, and I still have to find a name for a neutral god. Besides those I would take some gods who post on the boards. If you wish to recruit, give me: - Name of god and say if god is or (or neutral). - Name of creature and say if creature is or (or neutral). - Personality of god and creature. - Whether you are weak or powerful. - What rank you would want in a clan (servant (weak or strong), lieutenant, elite or independent). If you don't care about strength or rank PLEASE SAY IT! It will make it much easier for me! If you recruit there ISN'T a 100% chance you are in the story. If you don't fit in, you won't get in. Ps: Look at other people who recruit. If only strong Elite's recruit, don't recruit as an Elite, for the chance you get in is minimal. IPORTANT!!!!!! TO ALL RECRUITERS (if there are any), THE FOLLOWING CREATURES CAN'T BE USED: The Wolf, the Lion, the Turtle, the Crocodile and the Tiger. I REPEAT, THESE CREATURES CAN'T BE USED! Thank you. pss To Voyager: If you don't know how to install MSN, ask a friend!

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story. Alas....so many to read, so little time... You needn't recruit Gods. Make your own up! Nor do you need to stick to the original BW creatures. Take Iacobus the White's 'Higher Powers 2', for instance. One of the Gods in that has a badger Just for your benefit, however, I shall make up a God for you: Name: Shaikhan - Neutral/ Name of Creature: Aurelius - Neutral/ Fox (Change it if you want. A Rhino would be nice) Personality: Generally well respected by their peers, Shaikahn and Aurelius tend to their villager's needs, and teach them to take care of themselves. Having said that, they don't hesitate to "deal" with more stubborn unbelievers with a quick fireball or three. Strength: Medium/Powerful. Has one large capital city with a number of smaller villages surrounding it. Rank in Clan: Independant. Dislikes calling other gods/other gods calling him 'Sir', as he believes they should be able to take care of themselves. Carries out Clan strategies, but only if it benefits him, too. See? Its not that hard

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well, i too would say, make up your own, it's much easier, but anyway i'm temptable . Name: Terran Strictly Name of Creature: Bear Earthsoul Personality: Terran is an Earth god (like sungods and stuff ), he will mostly earth himself somewhere and change the terrain arround him to fit his defensive style, he'll almost never go in to the attack but can defend fierce using every inche of earth within his reach. He is loved by his people who know how to live of the earth he furtilizes with miracle water (that being his favorite miracle). He has many miracles that are purely nature based. He doesn't have many city's but the ones he has are almost undefeatable because of the wonderfull geographical situation he put himself in. Strength: He is very strong in defence, rarely attacks, so he has a small army but can withstand thousands with full provisions. Rank in Clan: He is elite but doesn't always work strategy-wise. He will however try to divert the enemy to attack him rather than his weaker clanmates. Hope he helps you. I've been thinking about a new story lately. Seeing DRALION didn't made me think otherwise (Dralion is the new Cirque du soleil production which revolves around the elements). It would be cool to have four gods competing against eachother, each having different miracles according to the use of their elemental powers . Terran(earth) is one, Solar(fire) would be a good two, Aqilira(water) would be a third and Ventiarus(wind) would be a good fourth . Comment me on that one .

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Thanks Amaunator and Bludgeonman. I think I can get you both in. I'm not sure about the fox (fox and wolf are not an extreme difference), but we'll see about that. I hope more people wish to recruit as well. About amaunator's idea: It could be good... but you will have to write Amaunator returns to Eden as well. It's quite hard to write 2 or more stories at a time. You must make sure you can write at least two chapters a week, because if you don't one will slow down and perhaps be lost forever... If you wish to write it, fine. But remember you must also post chapters at your other story, unless you wish to make faithfull readers sad (like me). If you write the story you will probably have to chose sides... It's hard to write 2 or 3 different sides, nevermind 4... I'm not stopping you however. I'm just warning you it will be hard. If you wish to do it, GO FOR IT! I'll start writing a new chapter soon as well. It will probably arive tomorrow (on saturday) or on sunday. To all readers who are writers, KEEP WRITING!

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Testing...testing... Sorry fellas, but he's being funny with posting... Testing...testing... Ignore this post.

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Just to interject, 'cause I'm not sure you already know, but "terran" is a real word, meaning "human". It is most commonly used in Sci-Fi novels where humans aren't the only race, but it is a word nonetheless.

Funny. I thought 'terran' was something that lived on or was about earth (not just a human), from the latin 'terra' meaning earth. I could be wrong, I don't do latin, but I'm pretty sure it meant more than just 'human'. e.g Terraforming is the theoretical manipulation of a planet's atmosphere, etc, to make it earth-like, to be inhabited by humans. I'm sure someone who actually knew latin could go on for awhile...

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Well, if it were completely true to the Latin, then yes Terran could mean anything to do with the Earth. However, Terran isn't even a Latin form of the world, instead it has been Anglicised, and is now used to mean 'human'. The true genetive of terra is in fact terrae, meaning 'of the ground/land' BTW, nice story so far

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ehmm, does it matter what Terra means? Next chapter wil be here shortly (I hope). And remember that gods may recruit for my story. Look at page 1 of this thread.

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Chapter three has arrived! You might notice it has got another name than planned. ENJOY! Chapter 3: Reconnaissance. I looked around. I saw there were three other Cities. The Greek City was in the east of the island. A Japanese City was in the north of the island. Their land was fertile, and rich in water, and there were great forests. Around the City, and even in the City, much of the ground was used for farming. I saw some farmers harvest grain, but most were busy with the rice they grew. The town seemed to trade food with other Cities. The City seemed prosperous enough. They were well protected from enemies, for mountains were around the City, and one large and powerful wall closed the only entrance to the city. In the city there was a beautiful castle. I guessed that the City’s leader would be living there. To the south of the island there was a desert. In that desert, at the southern peak of the island, was an Egyptian City. It was at the sea, but there still weren’t many plants. There was a well, but there were no farms. They did have some goats and cows, but they had no other way of getting food by themselves. I guessed that they traded with the Japanese so they would get enough food. There were no mountains around the city; the greatest natural barrier against enemies would be the heat. The sand would slow down enemies as well. But these natural barriers were not needed, for the walls were high, broad, and as strong as the mountains. Many strange wooden constructs were on the wall. But most imposing was the gigantic fortress looming over the walls. It was at least twice as high as the walls. It looked like the earth had made it by itself. It had large shining gates, once again made by this shining material. ‘That shining material is iron, leader.’ Beardy had popped into view. ‘It is stronger than wood or stone. People use it for very large homes, temples, walls, monuments and other buildings. ’Demon popped into view as well. ‘What are ya talkin’ about? All right, they use it for walls and such, but it isn’t only for buildings! It’s also for creating weapons! Like swords. Really useful, this stuff.’ Beardy scowled at him. ‘That may be true leader, but you should mainly use it for buildings. You can find iron ore in mountains. The villagers will create a mine and mine for ore in the mountains. Then they will smelt the ore and create useable iron.’ I stared at him. ‘What do you mean with ‘in the mountains’ if I might ask?’ Beardy looked at me with an irritating flair of extreme patience. ‘The villagers create a mine. From the entrance of the mine they start digging into the mine towards the ore. There they get it out of the mountain.’ I thought about it. Had they actually become smarter? When I arrived on Eden for the first time they were dumber than the dumbest donkeys. They had indeed improved. ‘You don’t have to think so little of them, leader.’ Beardy looked accusingly at me. ‘How did you know what I was thinking?’ I asked abashed. Demon laughed loudly. ‘We’re your conscience boss, we can see what you think. Or hear, whatever you wish to call it. And I totally agree, they ARE dumb. But they have become more intelligent. They finally know how to kill each other, a great improvement.’ I laughed. ‘How evil can you be, Demon?’ I asked, still laughing. ‘Much more than I already am.’ Said Demon while grinning evilly. Beardy looked disapproving. I turned to look to the west, and my smile faded. It was a dark land, rocky, full of Vulcano’s and there was no visible fertile ground. And yet there still was a City. I wondered how they lived, for no roads went to it, and no trader could be seen heading that way. Smoke was rising constantly from the City. It was as dark as the land. I felt they believed in a god. He wasn’t here though. Not on the island. I couldn’t see a temple however. I looked around and saw a pillar of black stone rising into the air. It stood on a mountain near the City. I immediately knew it was the temple. Only if the City was destroyed or taken you could get to the temple, for the only road went trough the City. Thanks to the mountains there were three passes which led into the City. Each of the passes was guarded by a wall. At the back of the City another wall stood between the City and the temple, probably as a last defence. I looked for a while at the gloomy land. At the borders of this grey land was a jungle. I was certain it was full of dangerous animals and diseases. I saw that it was getting darker. I went back to my village. I saw that the foundations of my new temple had already been made. It seemed that my new temple would be square. I searched for Cratas, and I found him giving orders to some builders. He saw me and said: ‘Hello, holy one. The construction is coming along nicely.’ I looked at him and asked: ‘Is there anything I can do?’ He shook his head. ‘No lord. We’re about to quit for today.’ I looked at the people who were working. ‘Gather all the villagers.’ Cratas looked puzzled. ‘Why, holy one?’ I looked at him and said: ‘You’ll see.’ He immediately hurried of to gather everybody. A few minutes later everybody was standing in front of me. I concentrated on the power of the Creed. Then I concentrated on healing. Suddenly a glowing light appeared, enveloping everybody in the crowd. Cuts were healed, and the people were no longer tired. To my surprise, the grass seemed greener. ‘The heal miracle now also heals plants and other living things.’ Beardy popped in sight. ‘Many other miracles have disappeared, changed or have just become more powerful.’ I mentally thanked him, and he disappeared with a smile. ‘And now you can all go to bed!’ I said to the people who were now talking to each other. ‘Tomorrow you can continue working.’ All the villagers went back to their homes. I summoned my conscience. They immediately popped in sight. ‘What’s up boss?’ Demon asked sleepily. ‘Tomorrow I wish to learn some miracles and know what has changed.’ I said. ‘Okay, whatever boss. Just let me sleep.’ Demon disappeared. Beardy however looked quite happy. ‘That’s a good idea, leader. If you know more miracles you can help the villagers in times of need. Now if you’ll excuse me I wish to sleep as well.’ He disappeared as well. I thought for a moment and then looked to the west, to the dark and gloomy land. There seemed to be a heavy storm above the land. Was that a natural storm? I looked intrigued to the storm, and I felt something strange. Like some portal was being opened. Suddenly there was a beam of dark-blue light near the temple. After a while a portal opened, and out of it came a god, many of his followers, and to my shock, a gigantic -looking stag came out. A creature! I still had to find one. Suddenly the god looked at me, but he didn’t approach me, nor did he do anything else. After a few seconds he turned his back on me and began ordering his followers. I decided to rest and see what would happen. I hovered in an almost trance-like state, still seeing what was happening, and at the same time resting. Tomorrow I would find out who his god was. The next chapter will be: Chapter 4: The meeting (unless the name changes again). Remember that you can recruit for this story (see page one). I'm still in need of gods. I don't know when the next chapter will be ready. Please give me critism!

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Yes, i was very aware that Terran also meant earthling (or human, to make it easy). strangely enough everytime i think about it i see images of starcraft rushing past my eyes (terrans, prottos and zerg are the races playable). And since he is a god of nature he has to be linked to the soil. Saying he's from earth, born and subdued to earth is his lifeline . (Told you it was element stuff) P.S: chapter, nice entré from the god .

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God name: Marrvic (or Marr for short) Creature name: Death-eater God alignment: used to be but very now God personality: he loves darkness he tortures people for fun he does epic miracles when he charges them up, creates vampires and wants to beat the leader of his clan (he can easily but he cant find him) Creature type: stag Creature alignment: Creature personality: he is so dark that if he stands over a city the sun will be blocked out (if you want more you decide) Creature age: 22 Creature years Creature height 600 foot 1” (200 metres .2) God rank: high/medium God power: more powerful than nemesis You can change any thing but please not the name or power Thank you.

Thank you Jediwars, I think you can easily fit in... It will be a short while before I can post another chapter, though... Cya!

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Well, here is a name you CAN'T undermine Instead of Terran I will choose Gythos (a binding from hij gij (that's how we write it without Greec letters so excuse me all greeks ) and theos which means earth and god ). If anybody else would like to challenge me about the fact that it's just earthgod but isn't Greec at all, just a sum of two Greec words, then here is an even better one GYNOTHOS!!! The ultimate name. Now it's god of the earth! Haha, have at thee Voyager .

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